Haiku of the Day (Raquel)
February 16, 2007 by sharppointythings
how slowly time flows
ever rushing, crashing on
to make the future nowÂÂ
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Guys, help me out here–does this make sense? I’m trying to put words to a contradictory feeling, but it seems like it just came out… well, contradictory.
Can you express (in prose) the feeling that you’re trying to express in the poem?
I can try, but I’m not sure that will make sense either… It’s mostly just being aware that time keeps going by faster and faster, and I can feel that happening more as I get older. But at the very same time I’m impatient to get to the next part of my life, and that makes it feel as though time is dragging. I really wish the two feelings would just cancel each other out instead of simultaneously existing in my head.
Is it impatience, or concern that what you hope to be the next part of your life might never happern?
For the time being, impatience. It does tend to fluctuate, though.
Well, you could get all metaphorical. That’s what poetry is good at, anyways. What’s an image that captures that sense of accelerating time? (I totally understand that feeling, by the way.) Now, what’s an image that captures that sense of dragging time? Now, how can you cross them effectively?
Yes, this could be tricky, but no one said that writing haiku is *easy*.
Besides, I think that it will be more effective that way. You don’t want to *tell* people about this dual perception of time; you want them to *feel* it.
the writer’s ink–
his blood
on the page
(Hmm. Or maybe)
snow white page
the writer sweating
ink and blood
It’s moments like this that I think ‘I’ll never really be any good at this haiku thing, so why do I keep trying?’ Sigh.
You gave me a good angle, which I couldn’t find before, so give me a couple weeks and I’ll see if I can come up with anything.