Haiku of the Day (Raquel)
days drip slowly past
carried off forever
by rushing waves of time
This is a rewrite of this haiku, based on the discussion that followed. (Okay, so it didn’t take me a couple of weeks.) I also wrote this less communicative, but more amusing version.
time flows
like surging rapids
of molasses
After some reflection, I agree that the first haiku is the better replacement for the original. That being said, I like the idea of molasses rapids.
Crawling seconds
Ride the back
Of Galloping years.
I love the haikus - keep up the good work! Have you ever participated in a renga/renku lately?